Student Essay November 29th, 2004 (Rated at 4 / 6)
Depending on background and education, this issue provides different perspectives. In my opinion, the choice of a life oriented to the moment versus one guided to the future is evident. I decide my acts in prevision of tomorrow because I prefer to save for the next days and to anticipate the needs of future.
Today is the shortest moment of a life and the days after are greatly numerous thus the assess of situation disclose the necessity to choose the weighted part of balance. Whether I buy or not a car will affect my saving for the next months. Despite the society want us satisfy immediately our desires, I tend to avoid spending my money to use it later.
Day after day, we have to manage our life to obtain a better position whereas if I take successively various ways I will never acquire in-depth knowledge. For instance, at school and universiry we have the choices of our orientation. Changing without managing the learning interests is the best way to know lots of topics but superficially. Therefore, people in this way may not adapt to the job market where the qualification is necessary.
In conclusion, whereas our pleasure guides us to choose instantly; the weak interest gained will trouble our future. Thus I advocate the overall plannification to profit later from works and earnings.
Instructor Reviewed Essay
Depending on background and education, this issue provides different perspectives. In my opinion, the choice of a life oriented to the moment versus one guided to
- on the background
the future is evident. I decide my acts in prevision of tomorrow because I prefer to save for the next days and to anticipate the needs of future.
- “prevision” is not a word
Today is the shortest moment of a life and the days after are greatly numerous thus the assess of situation disclose the necessity to choose the weighted part of
- greatly more
- numerous based on which it is necessary
- in my opinion
balance. Whether I buy or not a car will affect my saving for the next months. Despite the society want us satisfy immediately our desires, I tend to avoid spending
- Whether or not I buy a car / Whether I buy a car or not
- “Despite” is a preposition not a connector
- would tend
my money to use it later.
Day after day, we have to manage our life to obtain a better position whereas if I take successively various ways I will never acquire in-depth knowledge. For
- position. If
- “successively various ways” has no meaning
instance, at school and universiry we have the choices of our orientation. Changing without managing the learning interests is the best way to know lots of topics but
- “orientation” is incorrect word choice; perhaps you mean major, discipline etc.
- without considering
superficially. Therefore, people in this way may not adapt to the job market where the qualification is necessary.
- which “qualification”? unclear
In conclusion, whereas our pleasure guides us to choose instantly; the weak interest gained will trouble our future. Thus I advocate the overall plannification to profit
- fleeting benefit gained
- strategy
later from works and earnings.
